Essay Revision

I plan to develop my points further to move out of the general form of the essay. I also need to open my paragraphs in a better way. Instead of using broad points, I need to tie in these sentences to the thesis. Moreover, I need to give better introductions to my quotations instead of just plopping them randomly in the paragraphs. Mainly, I plan to think more about my topic and try to make a more debatle and interesting point.